Forbidden Lovers Caught In a Web of Lies, Sex and Deceit Reviewed by Kevin R. Tipple

Forbidden Lovers Caught In a Web of Lies, Sex and Deceit By Janice Kyle
Trafford Publishing

ISBN# 155369389-2 Rating **

Carmen Hailey is sorely in need of a vacation and decides to embark on a trip marketed as "A Weekend Getaway to Colorado Springs." She meets a man at the airport who almost instantly arouses her and then discovers to her pleasure after he boards the plane that they are both going on the getaway trip. His name is Jack and he feels the same way about her and within a matter of paragraphs they have arrived, kissed each other in the rental car and wound up in a hotel room.

What follows is their first erotic encounter, which while quite detailed is unintentionally hilarious for the reader. Sentence after sentence has words such as cuming spelled out for emphasis, which should be done only in rare cases. For example, one sentence reads, "She whispered, "Jack, I'm cuuuummmmmmmmiiiiiinnngggg, aaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh, Jack, who is Carmen?" Beyond the fact that the character never has to gasp for breath or come up for air, sentences written that way for page after page become a bit hard to take especially when it does not make sense. Beyond the orgasm part-I got that loud and clear. But, if Carmen is with Jack, why would Carmen ask who is Carmen unless it is some weird Bob Dole comment variation.

Ignoring that issue, Carmen is not at all happy about Jack being married (unhappily, of course) but she is incredibly attracted to him. The fact that according to her, he is a stallion does not hurt things either. Soon they are back at it and end up spending the getaway weekend in each other's arms.

But the fun in Colorado Springs follows her back home to Seattle. Soon she finds herself in the midst of an affair with a married man while lying to herself, the other man in her life, and others. The problem with lies is that once they are started they have a way of compounding and growing until the whole situation spins out of control.

The problem for this book is while Janice Kyle has a good idea for a story, the idea was poorly executed. This is another case where the author apparently paid to be published when the money would have been better spent paying a good editor. Beyond the questionable spelling substitution for a women's genitalia used at the author's discretion are the issues regarding sentences as noted above, incorrect shifts in pov and tenses and quotation marks used incorrectly. These problems run throughout the book from start to finish and therefore make it a difficult book to read and rate.

On hand, the book as written has major presentation problems. While it is a first book for the author and some allowance has to be made, these problems should have been caught in the editing process. The fact that they were not does a tremendous disservice to the author and her work. On the other hand, this author had a good idea and shows potential in the work, which is why instead of giving it a no star rating, I gave it two stars. I really wanted to like this book, especially after talking to the author several times via e-mail. Regardless of my ranking, what she really needs is a good editor and I hope she finds one before spending more money just to see her name in print.